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You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant mnager. In your letter Give details of your visit to the restaurant Explain the reason for the celebration Say what was good about the food and the service

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my gratitude regarding an event my friends and
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 held yesterday in your restaurant. The dinner was devoted to my birthday, and I would like to admit that it was the most delightful celebration I have ever had. Regarding the event, it should be mentioned that my major goal was to enjoy communication with my guests, so it was crucial to reserve a quiet area of the venue. Since there were only 5 of us, the waiter provided us with a separate table.
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, we had an opportunity to immerse ourselves in chatting without being irritated by loud music or other noise.
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, the waiter did not disturb us excessively, contributing to the perfect service. Another aspect I found great was the meal. The fish was a masterpiece,
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 the warm salad. I would definitely recommend my friends and colleagues to visit your restaurant and try the menu. As for the drinks, the red wine was good,
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 I cannot recall anything special about it. I hope my feedback was useful to you. Best regards, Anastasia Fed

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coherence cohesion
Great structure with clear paragraphing. Each paragraph discusses a different aspect, enhancing readability.
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To improve task achievement, try to include more specifics about why the event was special and any particularly memorable moments related to the food or service.
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Consider expanding on unique or standout features of the food and service. For instance, describing a specific interaction with the staff or detailing a particular dish that impressed you could add richness to your letter.
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Ensure proper singular and plural agreement for more natural phrasing ('my friends and I' instead of 'my friends and me').
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Effective use of a formal tone appropriate for writing to a manager. Maintains politeness throughout the letter.
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Well-executed introduction and conclusion, clearly setting up the purpose of the letter and ending with a positive note.
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