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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world between 1990 and 2005.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world between 1990 and 2005.
The line chart compares how many overseas
tourist
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 arrivals in five places including North-
America
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, Central and Eastern Europe, South East Asia, Sub-Saharan Africa and South
America
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 over the 15-year period from 1990 to 2005. Generally speaking, most of the given areas experienced an upward trend. What stands out is that the total number of international
tourist
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 arrivals in North-
America
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 was the highest, compared to other
tourist
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 destinations. In the
last
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 decade of the twentieth century, the figure for North
America
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 was twice as much as four other places, at more than 70
million
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. The number of
tourist
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 arrivals in Centre and Eastern Europe followed with about 31
million
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,
whereas
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 in Sub-Saharan Africa and South
America
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, these numbers were only less than 10
million
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 each.
However
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, the trend saw a significant change by the turn of the twenty-first century. North
America
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 experienced a steady increase until it reached a peak at around 90
million
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 in 2000
then
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 slightly decreased in the next 5 years.
By contrast
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, the figure for Central and Eastern Europe rose considerably and was almost equivalent to North
America
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 in 2005.
While
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 South East Asia's number went up to less than 50
million
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, the figure for Sub-Saharan Africa was a bit higher than South
America
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's by 5
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourist, america, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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