The bar chart shows the average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1997 and 2003.

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The Bar chart illustrates data about

average

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the average

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prices of dressing traded

into

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Union Europe regions.The information will be calculated per

kilometer

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kilometre

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and between two decades from 1997 to 2003.

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, the importers will be compared between six countries that are Argentina,

Brazilian

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Brazil

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,Japan,China ,India and

Bangladeshi

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Bangladesh

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.Over

years

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the years

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Argentina’s percentages kept the higher point ,

while

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Bangladesh was the lowest. Starting with Argentina in 1993 the price was equal to just over 25

pounds

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. It showed a sharp decrease which was equal to 25.in

Brazil

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Brazil,

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the point

drop

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dropped

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by losing 5

pounds

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and from 1993 to 2003 figures in Brazil remained

steadily

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steady

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. In Japan , there

was

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were

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traded goods for 15

pounds

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which has been changed to just over 15. Starting with China ,

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for

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First

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the First

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times

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time

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it was equal to 10

percents

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percent

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. It has experienced an incredible rise to just over 15.In

India

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India,

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the fixed figure was equal to 5 . Afterward , in Twenty years the figure moved to just under 10. Going to

Banglades

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Bangladesh

, was 2/3 in 1993.

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it showed unnoticeable growth to 5

pounds

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Vocabulary: Replace the words pounds with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

180 words

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