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The bar chart shows the average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1997 and 2003.

The bar chart shows the average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1997 and 2003.
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The Bar chart illustrates data about
average
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the average
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 prices of dressing traded
into
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in
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 Union Europe regions.The information will be calculated per
kilometer
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kilometre
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 and between two decades from 1997 to 2003.
Overall
 , the importers will be compared between six countries that are Argentina,
Brazilian
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Brazil
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,Japan,China ,India and
Bangladeshi
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Bangladesh
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.Over
years
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the years
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 Argentina’s percentages kept the higher point ,
while
 Bangladesh was the lowest. Starting with Argentina in 1993 the price was equal to just over 25
pounds
 . It showed a sharp decrease which was equal to 25.in
Brazil
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Brazil,
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 the point
drop
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dropped
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 by losing 5
pounds
 and from 1993 to 2003 figures in Brazil remained
steadily
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steady
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. In Japan , there
was
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were
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 traded goods for 15
pounds
 which has been changed to just over 15. Starting with China ,
in
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for
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First
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the First
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times
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time
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 it was equal to 10
percents
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percent
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. It has experienced an incredible rise to just over 15.In
India
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India,
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 the fixed figure was equal to 5 . Afterward , in Twenty years the figure moved to just under 10. Going to
Banglades
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Bangladesh
, was 2/3 in 1993.
Then
 it showed unnoticeable growth to 5
pounds
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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