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The bar chart shows the level of air pollution in five different countries. Summarize the informationn by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart shows the level of air pollution in five different countries. Summarize the informationn by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given bar chart indicates the air pollution levels of five different
countries
 which
is
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 the UK, New Zealand, Austria, Australia, and the USA in
millions
 of tons.
Overall
, it is evident that the
countries
 in the north hemisphere produce a lot more
pollutants
 than
countries
 in the south hemisphere. The country laid
in
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at
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 the bottom of
equator
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the equator
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 line (New Zealand and Australia) has
generate
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generated
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a
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apply
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slightly different
of
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apply
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volumes of
pollutants
 at just thirty
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tons and around
thirthy-five
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forty-five
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tones
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tons
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 respectively.
On the contrary
, the
countries
that
is
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 geographically located
in
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at
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 the top of the equator line
seems
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seem
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 to produce much
more
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apply
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higher
pollutants
 (the UK, Austria, and the USA) with the USA leading the rank with
total
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a total
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 number of eighty
millions
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million
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 tones and the UK and Austria with the same number of the generated
pollutants
 which is
fourty
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forty
millions
 of tones.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, millions, pollutants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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