Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. Others say films should have educational value, discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is believed that
films
should only be evaluated based on recreational activities while
,
others claim that they should be able to educate audiences as well. From my perspective, I believe that both of the opinions Remove the comma
apply
has
their own qualities and will explain the point Change the verb form
have
further
.
On the one hand, it is true that watching movies
after long periods of work hours helps to wind down, especially some specific genres, such
as comedy and love drama action, which can bring exhilaration and hilarity among its viewers. These stimuli are scientifically proven to be able to energize and enhance their productivity during tasks. For Instance
, a lot of blockbusters nowadays follow the motif and become commercially successful, such
as films
like Avengers and Spiderman superhero movies
. Therefore
, it is under the impression that films
are created for entertainment and relaxation.
On the other hand
, the educational values of films
are paramount to societyand
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society and
society
thusthus
should not be neglected. More than half of the people who watch pictures are children. Correct your spelling
thus this
thus thus
For example
, if a child watches cartoons or movies
, it should impact them in a positive way. It is rather useful than inheriting stories physically into them. Thus
, if films
provide a way to influence positively , we can see a great change in the community.
In short, movies
can provide both entertainment and educational lessons simultaneously to the history of mankind. Although
it provides a positive influence to
the younger generation, negative regimes should be forbidden from people.Change preposition
on
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Grammar
Be mindful of your grammar and punctuation. Using phrases correctly and checking for typographical errors can improve clarity. For instance, consider revising 'it is believed that films should only be evaluated based on recreational activities' to a more grammatically precise statement.
Language Use
Try to use a variety of linking words to improve the flow of your essay. This enhances coherence by connecting ideas more smoothly.
Content Development
In the discussion of each viewpoint, including more detailed examples or explanations of how films can educate or entertain, could strengthen your argument. This would also assist in providing a more balanced discussion on both views.
Paragraph Structure
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and develops that idea fully. This helps in maintaining coherence and cohesion throughout your essay.
Introduction & Conclusion
Your introduction and conclusion effectively frame your discussion, clearly presenting both sides of the argument and your opinion.
Use of Examples
Providing specific genres of movies as examples (such as 'Avengers' and 'Spiderman') helps illustrate your points regarding entertainment value.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.
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