In many parts of the world girls and boys are educated together in co-educational or mixed schools. Some people think that girls and boys benefit from being educated separately in single-sex schools. To what extent do you agree with this view?
During the
last
decades, humans' thoughts and insights have changed, then
types of teaching have also
variated in order to equalize learning. For
this
reason, nowadays, lectures are imparted in classrooms where there are both gender
with Change to a plural noun
genders
discrimation
. Correct your spelling
discrimination
However
, many people still argue that it is necessary to separate classes due to
its
sexual characteristics by creating schools for men and women Correct pronoun usage
their
splitely
. I completely disagree with Correct your spelling
spritely
politely
this
statement, and in this
essay, I explain my arguments.
To begin
with, there are many physiology
differences between Replace the word
physiological
female
and Fix the agreement mistake
females
male
, Fix the agreement mistake
males
then
they naturally complement each other because
their intrinsic biological and hormonal mechanisms. Add the preposition
because of
Besides
, development
of the brain Correct article usage
the development
variates
depending on genes that are expressed, Verb problem
varies
hence
girls have 'XX' sexual expression while
boys 'XY'
. Add a missing verb
have 'XY'
Therefore
, these attributes lead to strong variability from childhood and their neccesity
of complement between genders. Correct your spelling
necessity
For example
, visual studies have shown that women develop more accurate qualities to identify colors
, Change the spelling
colours
however
, eyes
of males have more Correct article usage
the eyes
capacitiy
to establish 3D spatiality.
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capacity
Additionally
, there are not only innate and nature
characteristics Replace the word
natural
such
as the aforementioned, but also
human beings have stood out as a
'social figures' that require constant communication for their mental health and wellness. As a Correct article usage
apply
consequent
, social relationships are crucial from Replace the word
consequence
early
years to reach every milestone, Correct article usage
the early
thus
co-education must be mandatory in order to teach children that there are differents
sexual features that have to be respected. Correct your spelling
different
Accordingly
, their tolerance and empathy will improve and many socializing problem
could be avoided.
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problems
To sum up
, schools should prioritize inclusive politics and emphasize in
education without boundaries and inequalities, Change preposition
apply
then
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and then
mixed-schools
should be supported by The Government.Correct your spelling
mixed schools
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Introduction
Make sure your introduction clearly states your position to guide the reader smoothly into your arguments.
Example
It would be advantageous to include more diverse and specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
Argument
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Accuracy
Pay attention to the precise use of terms ('discrimination' seems misused) and proofread for minor errors to improve clarity.
Structure
Your essay demonstrates a good structure, dividing your ideas logically into paragraphs.
Argument
You've successfully made a strong case for co-educational systems by emphasizing the benefits of gender complementarity and social skills development.
Conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your views, reinforcing the argument for mixed schools.