Write a letter to a colleague who is hospitalized at the moment. In your letter you should • ask about his/her health • let him/her know what changes occurred since he/she has been hospitalized • also try to make him/her happy in some ways

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Hello dear Mubina, I am very sad to realise that your

hospitalized

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were hospitalized

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for so long. It seems like that our office is getting smaller and smaller. I am very considered

to know

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in knowing

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about your health condition. Hope that you will join us as soon as possible. Just let me know if you feel worse. There

has

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been many changes since you got hospitalized.

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, Mr. Johnson's wife gave birth to a very pretty baby girl. I am going to become the lead- economist in Karshi.

Unfortunately

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Mrs. Rasulova got fired due

the

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to the

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layoff at work.

Moreover

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I have good news for you! Your position has been promoted to office manager.I congratulate you on your salary increase

along with

the position of general manager. I am sure that

this

news will make you happy. I believe that you will soon recover and return to our group. Warm regards, Emila.

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task achievement

Try to provide more specific details about the health inquiry to show genuine concern.

coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph covers a distinct topic to improve clarity and coherence.

coherence cohesion

Review for grammatical errors and stylistic improvements to enhance readability.

task achievement

You have effectively included all the requested information in your letter: inquiry about health, mentioning changes, and delivering happy news.

task achievement

The tone of your letter is friendly and encouraging, which is suitable for the context.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

148 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

hospitalized
well-being
updates
developments
lighthearted
assistance
gossip
isolated
eagerness
colleagues
well wishes
recuperation
morale
empathy
reassurance

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Write a letter to a colleague who is hospitalized at the moment. In your letter you should • ask about his/her health • let him/her know what changes occurred since he/she has been hospitalized • also try to make him/her happy in some ways

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