The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph below indicates the number of tourists who visited a Caribbean
island
from 2010 to 2017 and their accommodation includes visitors who are staying on cruise ships and those who staying on the
island
and a total of both.
To begin
with, the number of people who stayed on cruise ships in 2010 was under 0.5
million
by 2011 reached half a
million
but again fluctuating up to 2013 remained at half a
million
than from 2014
this
amount started a dramatic growth eventually, and in 2017 reached 2
million
people.
Secondly
, the people who stayed on the
island
in 2010 and 2011 was at the same level of around 0.7
million
then
in 2012 significantly increased to over 1
million
next,
in 2013 had a slight jump that reached 1.5 and
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the next two years remained at the same amount but in 2016 had a little decrease and
finally
in 2017 again reached 1.5
million
. In total, the number of both stayed on
island
and cruise ships in 2010 was 1
million
then
had a small increase that reached around 1.2
million
in 2012 again had a little growth reaching 1.5
million
after 2012 every year had considerable growth half a
million
until 2014 than in 2015 and 2015 was at the same level of over 2.5
million
finally
in 2017 dramatically increased to 3.5
million
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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