Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In an age of admiring strength, appealing for
collaboration
is not popular, and sometimes even considered as a sign of cowardice. However
, I firmly believe that any competition
is built upon collaboration
to some degree.
When we are involved in some competition
or watch fierce games, we tend to overlook the fact that without acquiescent collaboration
, competition
could not exist. For example
, the Celtics and the Mavericks, two NBA teams, have just finished their final in September this
year. In their series games, they all desperately desired to be the final winner and thereby competed with each other, which, however
, does not erase the basic fact that on the one hand
, the players in one team have to collaborate to win; on the other
hand
, the two teams need to follow some game rules together. This
adequately suggests that collaboration
, though usually eclipsed by the enthusiasm of competition
, solidly underlies competition
.
Nevertheless
, I am not intent on demonstrating such
arguments as competition
is worthless or competition
is inferior to cooperation. On the contrary
, I view competition
as an indispensable complement to collaboration
. Without competition
, collaboration
would easily lapse into various kinds of monopolies. For illustration, when Tesla, a giant in E-cars, had no competitors in the market before 2015, its popular model sold at 500, 000 yuan. As a comparison, due to
the rapid growth of other car companies, like Xiaopeng, Lixiang, and BYD, Tesla has lost its monopoly and decided to form a strategic collaboration
relationship with other major private car companies to cultivate a flourishing car market. This
indicates that competition
can contribute to beneficial collaboration
.
To summarise, on the one hand
, competition
can be a good complement to collaboration
; on the other
hand
, collaboration
is radically important for the existence of competition
. Therefore
, we should achieve a balance between them, and if that cannot be realised, maintaining cooperation is more important.Submitted by hx88375757 on
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