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Some people believe that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others argue that these two aims are not compatible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is an ongoing debate over individuals about whether economic development is possible with a clean
environment
 or not.
While
 some argue that these two goals are not compatible, I believe that it can be done by doing some policies like investing in greener energies and
pay
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 subsidies to industries. I will elaborate on my opinion. On the one hand, some state that destroying the
environment
 is an inevitable consequence of economic growth.
For example
, Exploiting crude oil from the deep sea or making furniture and home appliances by cutting trees certainly damages the ecosystem. To some extent, harm to the
environment
 is a prerequisite for countries and humans have no other choice except to hurt natural habitats for economic progress and to expand infrastructure.
For example
, since 22, the Amazon has been ruined by the Brazilian government
due to
 some economic reasons.
Conversely
, others believe that
although
 economic development’s side effects on the
environment
 are undeniable in some perspectives, the thriving and maintenance of the economy and infrastructure is compatible with preserving natural habitats and the
environment
.
Firstly
, we, as a policymaker and researchers, can mitigate the negative impacts of economic growth by encouraging investment in green energies and sustainable energy sources. Companies could find new sources of raw materials and energy
instead
 of old solutions.
Secondly
, the governments could allocate resources to decrease the constant exploitation of natural resources and pay subsidies to industries to use less polluted energy or avoid hurting the
environment
 as much as possible.
Thus
, these acts can reduce the demerits and negative aspects of economic development in different countries. In conclusion,
although
 there is a common belief that successful economic progress is always accompanied by bad environmental conditions, I believe that players in
this
 game can play their roles by doing some beneficial acts.
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Review your essay to ensure that all parts of the essay question are fully addressed. While you have a clear opinion, tapping into all aspects of the question can elevate your response.
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Your essay provides a clear structure with a distinct introduction, discussion of both views, and a conclusion, which aids in the logical flow of ideas.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • environmental sustainability
  • policies
  • technology
  • commitment
  • green technology
  • renewable energy sources
  • carbon emissions
  • pollution
  • industrial development
  • production
  • consumption
  • depletion of natural resources
  • loss of biodiversity
  • unsustainable
  • consumption patterns
  • sustainable development
  • technological innovation
  • global cooperation
  • circular economy
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