The graph below shows the population figures of different types of wild birds in the one country between 1970 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the population figures of different types of wild birds in the one country between 1970 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The line chart illustrates the amount of different
species
of wild birds in the United Kingdom from 1970 to 2004.
Overall
,
during
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from
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1970 to 2004, all
species
experienced a steady population growth. But there was a consistent increase
for
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in
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Coastal
species
through the periods.
In contrast
, the amount of Farmland
species
dropped significantly. In detail, Woodland
species
used to be the largest bird population in 1970-1973,
had grown
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by 10%, but it constantly decreased right after that period and was overtook by Coastal
species
which
also
surpassed three other
species
up until 2004, increased by more than 30% compared to 1970. Meanwhile, Farmland
species
was constantly declining
in
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from
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1978 until 2004. It experienced a negative growth
by
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almost 50% down.
Moreover
, it can be seen that all
species
once had a slight growth of population 7 years later after 1970,
then
it continued to grow steadily ever since
although
sometimes it
also
went down or up, but not significantly.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words species with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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