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The diagram below shows the plan of public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the plan of public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
Linking Words
 diagram shows the difference
of
Change preposition
between
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 public
library
Fix the agreement mistake
libraries
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 20 years ago and now. In my opinion,
computer
Correct article usage
the computer
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 games section become
more
Change the word
apply
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bigger and it has been transferred to children's fiction books and
area
Correct article usage
an area
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 for
organization
Add an article
the organization
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 of
story telling
Correct your spelling
storytelling
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 events.
In addition
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, there is
cafe
Correct article usage
a cafe
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instate
Correct your spelling
instead
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 of
enquiry
Correct article usage
an enquiry
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 room and
that's
Unnecessary verb
that
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help
Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
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 library visitors to take
rest
Correct article usage
a rest
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 and drink or eat.
Also
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,
Correct article usage
the kids
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kids
Change noun form
kids'
kid's
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 books room
replaced
Add a missing verb
was replaced
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 by
lecture
Correct article usage
the lecture
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 room, which is more convenient for students to review their subjects and
studying
Replace the word
study
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 as a
groups
Correct the article-noun agreement
group
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.
Furthermore
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, more facilities added for
exampl
Correct your spelling
example
self service
Add a hyphen
self-service
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 machines,
more
Correct word choice
and more
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 reference books.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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