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Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart delineates
average
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the average
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 monthly
price
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 variations of three metals. Namely
copper
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,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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according to
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 2014 data.
Overall
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,
Nickel
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 shows significant variation from the rest of the metals.
The
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Copper
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copper
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 has almost consistent
price
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change
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changes
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 starting from
january
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January
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 to
december
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December
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. In the initial
month
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 of 2014,
Nickel
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 has about 6 per cent considerable
price
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 growth
whereas
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zinc
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 and
copper
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 has 1 and 2 per cent respectively.
On the other hand
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, during the
month
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 of June, the cost of
Nickel
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 dropped to almost -3 resulting in a huge
price
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 down for the same.
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Similarly
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Similarly,
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zinc
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also
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 showed a decrease in metal
price
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 compared to the previous
month
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. The
Copper
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 was at its maximum
price
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on
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in
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the first
month
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 of 2014 and the least was during the
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month
Fix the agreement mistake
months
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 of
may
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May
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 and
june
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June
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. The lowest
price
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 drop for
Zinc
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was
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also happened
happened
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also
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 happened in the
month
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 of
june
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June
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as well as
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 in
october
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October
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.
At the end
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 of
this
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 year,
zinc
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 had the highest
price
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 change which was 2 per cent.
Then
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 comes
Nickel
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,
after
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and after
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 that
Zinc
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, nickel, zinc, month with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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