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Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart delineates
average
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the average
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 monthly
price
 variations of three metals. Namely
copper
,
nickel
 and
zinc
according to
 2014 data.
Overall
,
Nickel
 shows significant variation from the rest of the metals.
The
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Copper
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copper
 has almost consistent
price
change
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changes
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 starting from
january
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January
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 to
december
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December
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. In the initial
month
 of 2014,
Nickel
 has about 6 per cent considerable
price
 growth
whereas
zinc
 and
copper
 has 1 and 2 per cent respectively.
On the other hand
, during the
month
 of June, the cost of
Nickel
 dropped to almost -3 resulting in a huge
price
 down for the same.
Similarly
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Similarly,
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zinc
also
 showed a decrease in metal
price
 compared to the previous
month
. The
Copper
 was at its maximum
price
on
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in
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the first
month
 of 2014 and the least was during the
month
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months
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 of
may
Capitalize the word
May
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 and
june
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June
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. The lowest
price
 drop for
Zinc
was
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also happened
happened
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also
 happened in the
month
 of
june
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June
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as well as
 in
october
Change the capitalization
October
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.
At the end
 of
this
 year,
zinc
 had the highest
price
 change which was 2 per cent.
Then
 comes
Nickel
,
after
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and after
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 that
Zinc
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, nickel, zinc, month with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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