You live in a room in college which you share with another student. There are many problems with this arrangement and you find it difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter: describe the situation explain the problems and why is it difficult to work say how you would like the situation resolved

Dear Sir or Madam, The purpose of writing
this
letter is to complain about the room and to request assistance in finding a better place for me. I would like to start by pointing out that the room was shared with another student from Alrawabi School and I have lived with her for 3 months. She stays out for most part of the day
while
I am studying for exams and it's difficult for me to concentrate on my studies. Another point which could be added is that my roommate plays loud music at night, playing different hunting games with loud sounds at night and that interrupts my sleep. I can not tolerate with her It is almost impossible to stay with her. I was wondering if you could be able to transfer me or my flatmate to another room. I would prefer a mate who is quieter and considerate. I hope you will take immediate action to solve the issue and look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Ayesha Madon
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task response
Try to provide more details about how the situation affects your studies and well-being for a more comprehensive response.
coherence and cohesion
Use a variety of linking words to improve flow and coherence in your paragraphs.
logical structure
You have structured your letter well, clearly separating the description of the situation, explanation of the problem, and the resolution you are seeking.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is appropriately formal, fitting the situation and the recipient of the letter.
complete response
You successfully outlined your concerns and suggested a practical solution, directly answering the task's requirements.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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