The pie chart below shows the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie chart below shows the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
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The given pie charts reveal statistics about the percentage of household expenses on five different
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and
services
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between two nations, namely Japan and Malaysia in 2010.
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, both countries allocated the largest proportion of their expenditure towards housing and other
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and
services
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,
while
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healthcare
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represented the least common spending. Housing expenditure in Malaysia accounted for the largest percentage, at 34%, more than the figures for the food category and other
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, with respective figures being 27% and 26% in 2010. During the same year, transport and healthcare constituted far less of the total household expenses, at 10% and 3%, respectively. For Japanese families, approximately one-third of their
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budget was spent on other
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, followed by 24% allocated to food. Housing and transport spending
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roughly the same, with 21% and 20% in that order, compared to only 6% in the figure for health care expenses.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, services with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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