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The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010

The map below show the village of Stockefort in 1930 and in 2010
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The two maps which are given illustrate the reformation of the village of Stockefort from 1930 to 2010.
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, on account of expanding the residential area, most of the farmlands
replaced
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 by
the
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houses over 80 years. By
the
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way of
comparisen
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comparison
, there were a number of significant changes over
past
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 decades. the farmland had been diminished completely and replaced by a myriad of residential buildings. Accessing those houses,
the
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new pathways were constructed.
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, the large house with its garden
were
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was
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 two of the places that had been deconstructed and turned into
the
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retirement
home
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homes
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 in the year 2010.
Although
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 the village substantially was
reconstructured
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reconstructed
restructured
, there were several
building
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buildings
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 which
were
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remained the same place during all those years.
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, the primary school and the post office are the ones that no operation had been
accured
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accrued
acquired
 on them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • facilities
  • landscape
  • sparse population
  • residential areas
  • commercial zones
  • recreational facilities
  • agricultural lands
  • local economy
  • transportation infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • public amenities
  • green spaces
  • quality of life
  • historical buildings
  • landmarks
  • preservation
  • urban development
  • environmental impacts
  • natural landscapes
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