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The pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The given diagrams illustrate the steps involved in making tomato
ketchup
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sauce
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 and how is delivered to people. There are 15 stages in the given process, from picking the
tomatoes
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 on the farm, to consuming at home with delicious food.
The first step is
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 that the
tomatoes
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 are picked and put in a basket by farmers. At
this
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 point, the good and bad
tomatoes
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 are sorted, for the
sauce
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 to be high quality. After being sent, the stalk and seed,
as well as
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 the skin are removed.
Next,
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the pure
tomatoes
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 are poured into a container.
subsequently
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, the
tomatoes
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 are crushed in the container.
Following
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this
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, in the middle of the process, sugar and vinegar
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 salt can be added which gives a good taste to the
sauce
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. After boiling, the liquid of the
tomatoes
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 is left for two hours for the
sauce
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 to set. The following steps are that the
ketchup
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 is ready and poured into a glass, after which the labels are attached. In order to use the
ketchup
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sauce
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, the quality is controlled.
Subsequently
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, after being wrapped by workers, the
ketchup
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 sauces are delivered to the supermarkets.
Finally
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, individuals can refer to the supermarkets and pick
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 and eat it with hamburger and fries
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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures to add complexity and enhance the flow of your writing.
Task Achievement
Try to include an introductory sentence that summarizes the overall process before diving into the details.
Coherence and Cohesion
For even greater clarity, you might create small paragraphs to group similar steps of the process together, enhancing the essay's organization.
Task Achievement
You provided a clear and comprehensive overview of the tomato ketchup manufacturing process.
Coherence and Cohesion
Good use of transition words to guide the reader through the steps of the process.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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