The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for the changes to the school site in 2024

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The first picture depicts the layout of the

school

site in 2004, and the second picture illustrates some proposed changes in 2024. As shown in the figures, in 2004, the

school

accommodated 600 students. At that time,located in the north were the two

school

buildings, with the sports field situated to the east of the two

school

buildings. By 2024, the student population is projected to reach 1,000, with plans for

school

Capitalize word

School

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Building 1 to have accessibility to

school

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School

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Building 2.

Additionally

, a third building is planned for construction to the east of the existing

school

buildings, replacing the sports field, which is planned to relocate eastward

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from

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Building 2.As can be seen,the size of the sports field is planned to contract. Car Park 2 is

also

planned to be positioned to the right of Building 3, with another new road alongside Building 2.

Overall

, significant changes can be identified

after

this

expansion;

however

, the southern area of the

school

remains similar in both pictures.

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The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for the changes to the school site in 2024

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