write a letter to an endocrinologist
I am writing to refer
Mr
Scott, a 74-year-old diabetic man, who is due to
be discharged today. He requires your visit for his uncontrolled blood
sugar
which is associated with musculoskeletal complications of diabetes in both legs.
Mr
. Scott was hospitalized with high blood
sugar
, despite regular treatment with oral hypoglycemic agents the blood
sugar
levels are still high. Additionally
, he suffers from pain and swelling in both legs, which started several months back with gradual progression.
During the admission, he had a micturition and incontinence, which was diagnosed as a urinary tract infection and he completed the period of antibiotic therapy based on the result of the urine culture.
Mr
. Scott had a history of typhoid fever in 1990 which was followed by a jaundice attack. His HBsAg has been positive since 1996 as well.
I would appreciate it if you could accept Mr
. Scott’s follow-up for controlling his constant high blood
sugar
and starting insulin if required.
If any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me.
Yours sincerely,
DoctorSubmitted by ali.homayoni93 on
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The letter successfully fulfills the task by referring Mr. Scott to an endocrinologist, specifying the reasons for referral and providing a brief medical history.
Coherence and Cohesion
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