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the pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the us between 1988 and 2000. Summarize the imformations and comparing

the pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the us between 1988 and 2000. Summarize the imformations and comparing
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The diagram and table below show the nominal and the origin
countries
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 of
fish
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 shipped to the US in 1988, 1992, and 2000. In general, the value of
fish
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 imported to the US has increased for 12 years.
Firstly
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, most of the
fish
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 shipped in 1998 was from
Canada
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 but the pattern has changed over time that in 2000
fish
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 imported from various
countries
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. Looking into detail, the increase in the import value was not significant over the period given, from 6.67 billion dollars in 1988 to 10.72 billion dollars in 2000, rising about 4 billion
dollar
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 in 12 years. Apparently, the demand
of
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for
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fish
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 was not quite high.
This
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 made less shipment from other
countries
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.
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, there were various
countries
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 that became
exporter
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exporters
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 to
US
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the US
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. Two of the
bigest
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biggest
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 ones were
Canada
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 and China. In 1988,
two-third
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two-thirds
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 of the
fish
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 imported to the US came from
Canada
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, only 13% from China.
Meanwhile
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 in 1992, the proportion of
fish
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 shipped from China rose 7% but
on the contrary
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,
Canada
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 experienced a great fall, that was a decrease of 26%.
This
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also
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 occurred in 2000 when other
countries
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 took over
Canada
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 to become the highest shippers.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, fish, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • import value
  • sources
  • trends
  • contributing countries
  • regions
  • significant changes
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • international trade agreements
  • overfishing
  • import strategies
  • fish industry
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