The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
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The chart depicts the various methods of
transportation
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like
Bus
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,
Car
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,
Bike
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and
Foot
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to have a journey from the workplace in a European town between 1960, 1980 to 2000.
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it is clear that
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, throughout the period
Bike
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and
Foot
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had a significant drop and
Car
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transportation
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went continuously upwardside and
Bus
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fluctuated throughout the time.
To begin
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with, in 1960 all methods of travelling had a gradual increase rather than
Car
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.
Bus
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,
Bike
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,
Foot
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and
Car
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with 20%, an around 27%, more or less than 35% and
Car
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with less usage proportion in 1960 of around 7%.
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, in 1980,
Bus
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went
further
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upwards by around 7% (27%), and
Car
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transportation
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had significant changes of approximately 18% (25%)
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, going to the workplace by Walking (
Foot
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) has steadily decreased by somewhere 18% and stood with 17%.
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,
Bike
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's userbase went a slight downward of somewhere 5% (22%).
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, by the late 2000s public
transportation
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like
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Bus
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buses
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had a downwards in usage portion with a roughly 10% ( 17%) and private
transportation
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Car
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Cars
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went upwards in terms of usage of around 10% (37%).
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Bike
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Bikes
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had a sudden drop of 15% and stood at 7%.
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, By the time walking by
Foot
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had a gradual dive and in 2000 it stood at approximately 9%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, bus, car, bike, foot with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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