The diagram below describes the structure of a home smoker and how it works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of making a home smokery in a house.
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it is clear that
there are three main stages beginning with letting fresh wind through a lid and ending with smoking products.
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To begin
with, the lid will be opened by the owner to let the fresh breeze from outside of the house come in. The breeze goes down a wide path and Linking Words
then
moves through the narrow one which lies horizontally to the next chamber. Linking Words
Furthermore
, the chamber is provided with fire and logs are used as fuel, Linking Words
also
it is covered with another lid.
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Additionally
, the air from the previous stage comes and blows the smoke caused by the combustion of the fire and logs, through a small pathway leading to the next empty space at ground level. A box will be applied to close the smoke from the second stage, Linking Words
as well as
, attaching a bar for hanging their products Linking Words
such
as fish. Linking Words
Finally
, the fish will be cured and smoked inside the box waiting for sale.Linking Words
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