The diagram below describes the structure of a home smoker and how it works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below describes the structure of a home smoker and how it works.  

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of making a home smokery in a house.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are three main stages beginning with letting fresh wind through a lid and ending with smoking products.
To begin
with, the lid will be opened by the owner to let the fresh breeze from outside of the house come in. The breeze goes down a wide path and
then
moves through the narrow one which lies horizontally to the next chamber.
Furthermore
, the chamber is provided with fire and logs are used as fuel,
also
it is covered with another lid.
Additionally
, the air from the previous stage comes and blows the smoke caused by the combustion of the fire and logs, through a small pathway leading to the next empty space at ground level. A box will be applied to close the smoke from the second stage,
as well as
, attaching a bar for hanging their products
such
as fish.
Finally
, the fish will be cured and smoked inside the box waiting for sale.
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