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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task: The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task: The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. You should write at least 150 words.
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The graph illustrates
that
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the
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 production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. There are three
caegories
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categories
 of fuel: Petroleum, Coal, and Natural
gas
.
Also
, it shows energy
units
 which from one million tonnes of oil per
one
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apply
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engergy
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energy
 unit. First of all, in
term
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terms
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 of Petroleum, it started at under 100
engergy
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energy
unit
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units
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 and increased gradually until 1985, which at 140 energy
units
.
However
, it decreased slightly until the year
of
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apply
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1990,
which
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when
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 recorded 100
engergy
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energy
unit
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units
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, followed by
arise
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a rise
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 again
since
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in
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 1991.
On the other hand
, Coal started from 80
units
 in 1981.
However
, it rapidly decreased in 1985, at 40
untits
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units
, followed by 60
units
 in 1986.
Then
, it gradually decreased until 2000, even if it showed
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a slightly
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slightly increased
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slight increase
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 in 1995.
For
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apply
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Natural
gas
, it started at under 40
units
, which is
lowest
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the lowest
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 level among
three
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the three
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fuel
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fuels
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.
However
,
while
 it did not change
number
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a number
the number
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 of
englergy
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energy
units
, it gradually increased from 1991. Eventually, it scored almost 100
units
 in 2000.
Overall
, the graph
suggest
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suggests
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 production of
pertoleum
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petroleum
 is
the
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at the
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 highest
levels
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level
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, followed by
batrual
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natural
gas
, and the lowest is coal. In 1991, natural
gas
strated
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started
 increasing number significantly. It might suggest people realized that the importance of
environment
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environmental
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 protection since 1991,
Thus
, they
seemed
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seem
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 to
product
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produce
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natral
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natural
gas
 more than coal.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fuel production
  • Trend
  • Steady
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant
  • Milestones
  • Turning point
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Evolve
  • Notable
  • Summarize
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