The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate the changes in the habitats of
salmon
, which is a species of big fish, and the range of its body size in each stage.
Overall
,
it is clear that
salmon
have three main environments to live in, these places can vary
according to
salmons' growing stages, which can be divided into fry, smolt, and adult. Looking at the first diagram,
salmon
grow in the lower
river
where water is fast flowing,
this
period generally lasts for 4 years.
Next,
they go to the open sea and live for approximately 5 years.
Finally
, they come to the upper
river
, but the
river
here is full of reeds and small stones and
thus
water is moving more slowly. Salmons stay at the upper
river
for around 5-6 months and lay their eggs at the bottom of the
river
. Concerning life stages, there are three stages in the
salmon
’s life cycle with different sizes. The first is the youngest stage 'fry' and these fish usually have a 3-8cm body length.
Then
, after leaving the lower
river
, they become 'smolt', which have a body length of 12-15cm.
Salmon
become adults when they leave the open sea, and in
this
stage, they have fully grown and are 70-76cm long.
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