The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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lain chart depicts the Percentage of
family
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families
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who have
a electrical appliances
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an electrical appliance
electrical appliances
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from 1920 to 2019
overall It
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is clear from the graph that, in 1920 the family
has
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did
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not have any ideas about
the
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washing Maschen and after almost 100 years the washing machine is the most
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popular
papulr
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popular
machine in the country
According to
what is shown, in the percentage of electrical
appliances
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appliances,
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the Vacuum cleaner it has 30%
of
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in 1920 after almost 100 years in 2019 taking a Hugh increased to 100%
an
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and
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seam
plaes
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places
plates
washing machine have the best
increased
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from 0% in 1920 to 100% in 100 years
secondly
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the number of Number of
hours
of housework per week
it
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has a
hugh
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huge
decreased from 50
Hours
per week in 1920 to 10
Hours
per week so in the Country
having
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almost 40
hours
spending time
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spent
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with electrical appliances and he has Chang to 10
hours
and it is
good
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a good
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things
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thing
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to
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for
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the
family’s
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family
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to save time and many
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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