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in many western countries, there is an increasing number of choosing to have no children. what advantages and disadvantages to having no children?

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 reducing mostly in the western countries . In
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children. On the one side , there
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Introduction Clarity
Consider revising the introduction for a clearer presentation of your essay's purpose and structure. A more detailed overview can guide the reader through your argument.
Idea Development
For a stronger essay, try to develop your ideas fully. Each point you introduce could be expanded with examples, explanations, or comparisons to firmly establish your argument.
Logical Flow
Working on a logical flow from one paragraph to the next will enhance readability and coherence. Connect your ideas with transition phrases or sentences that clearly signal the relationship between points.
Conclusion Presence
Including a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your overall stance will strengthen your essay. It helps the reader to understand your final perspective.
Topic Choice
You introduced a topic that has a good potential for discussion, addressing a contemporary issue that affects many societies.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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