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The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by four vehicles. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by four vehicles. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about four
fuel shaped
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fuel-shaped
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 vehicles
produced
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that produced
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the
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nitrogen
 oxide emissions.
Overall
, the petrol
car
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cars
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 and the diesel
car
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cars
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 approximately remained stable,
while
for
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the buses were the leading
vehicle
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vehicles
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 to emit
nitrogen
 oxides at all speeds. Moving to a detailed analysis, with regards to buses produced, it began at around 40
g
/
km
 and
then
 it decreased significantly and experienced the lowest figure at a speed of 60
kph
 to 25
g
/
km
. The
nitrogen
 oxide emissions produced by buses dramatically increased by 17
g
/
km
reached
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 42
g
/
km
among
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at
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speed
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speeds
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 of 60
kph
 and 130
kph
, which is the biggest indicator.
On the other hand
, in terms of the
nitrogen
 oxide emissions produced by lorries falling significantly
form
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from
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 33
g
/
km
 to 17
g
/
km
 during between the speed of 10
kph
 and 90
kph
.
This
 proportion increased a little and
finally
remainder
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the remainder
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 at 24, approximately. Is made up of the gas produced
of
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by
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 diesel
car
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cars
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 and petrol
car
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cars
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 fluctuated slightly and stood at
to
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5
g
/
km
 and 11
g
/
km
in
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at
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 the end of the speed, respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nitrogen, car, g, km, kph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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