The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

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The charts illustrate how households in

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and Japan spent their money on five different categories in 2010.

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, the household expenditures were primarily allocated to Other goods and services in Japan and to Housing in

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. Meanwhile, Healthcare was the least favoured category in both countries. Housing took up 21% of Japanese household spending in 2010, significantly less than the figure for

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, standing at 34%.

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, the amount of money

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Japanese

expended on Healthcare and Transport doubled that of Malaysians, constituting 6% and 20% compared to 3% and 10%, respectively. Other goods and services made up 29% of the budget of Japanese families, 3% higher than the percentage allocated by Malaysian households.

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, Food expenses constituted a smaller share in Japan at 24%, compared to 27% in

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cultural differences
economic differences
living standards
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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

People in many countries are spending more and more time away from their families. Why is this happening? How does this affect people and their families? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Research shows that overeating can be just as harmful as smoking. Thus the advertising of certain food products should be banned, as cigar is banned in many countries. Do you agree or disagree?

More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the causes. What can be done to solve this problem

Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays, all over the world people share the same advertising, brands, eating habits and TV channels. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of these fashions?

your friend is taking an exam and has asked to you help him/her with studying because he/she knows that you usually do well. write a letter to your friend. In your letter * Tell him /her how you study *Give him /her on advice about the week before the exam. * Explain what to do on the day

your friend is taking an exam and has asked to you help him/her with studying because he/she knows that you usually do well. write a letter to your friend. In your letter * Tell him /her how you study Give him /her on advice about the week before the exam. Explain what to do on the day