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The charts below present information about electricity generated using renewable and non-renewable energy in the United States in 2009 and 2019.

The charts below present information about electricity generated using renewable and non-renewable energy in the United States in 2009 and 2019.
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The given bar charts
represents
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 billions of
kilowatt
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kilowatts
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electricity
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of electricity
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 per
hours
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hour
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 generated by
energy
sources
 and renewable
energy
sources
 in the US in 2009 and 2019
Overall
, coal
had
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produced the maximum
amount
 of
energy
 from all the
energy
sources
 in
both
 the given periods.
Firstly
, it is clearly seen from the first graph that there are five types of
sources
 for generating
energy
.
Further
,
electricity
 generated by
petroleun
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petroleum
 and nuclear
sources
 were approximately equivalent in
amount
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an amount
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 in
both
the
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years. Renewable
sources
 of
energy
had
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produced 437 and 720
billions
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of
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kilowatt
electricity
 in 2009 and 2019. Apart from these, in the first given period natural gas
had
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generated 921 billion
kilowatt
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kilowatts
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electricity
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of electricity
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 which rose dramatically to 1582 in 2019 .
Moreover
, in
both
 the given periods coal
had
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generated the highest
amount
 of
electricity
as
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1756 in 2009 and 966 in 2019 billion
kilowatt
 .
Followed by
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 these,
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renewable
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renewables
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renewable
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energy
sources
such
 as geothermal and plant and
animal
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 matter
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had
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generated approximately
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the same
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same
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amount
.
However
, the solar and wind
sources
had
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produced
small
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a small
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smount
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amount
amounts
 of
electricity
 compared to high figures after a decade .
Lastly
, 273 billion
kilowatt
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kilowatts
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 of
electricity
 was generated by hydroelectric
source
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sources
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 in
both
 years.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words kilowatt, electricity, energy, sources, amount, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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