write a referral letter to an endocrinologist.
Thank you for seeing Miss Maryam Hassan, a 29-year-old patient, who has been suffering from sleep disorder, intermittent palpitation and non-significant weight loss. I am referring her to you with a doubt of hyperthyroidism to start medication as you deem appropriate.
I visited Miss Hassan 3 weeks back in our clinic
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when she came with sleep disorders, intermittent headaches, and dry eyes. She Remove the comma
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complained of slight weight loss of about 2 Kg during 2 months. Despite improving sleep hygiene and discontinuation caffeine consumption, not only sleeping pattern worsened
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occasional palpitation added to previous symptoms. Her dry eye sensation got worse despite using artificial eye drops.
She is a non-smoker single woman with regular physical activity and does not consume alcohol at all. She takes only vitamin D supplement
. Her family history does not have any significant points but diabetes in her grandmother.
Related to non-responsiveness to conservative management, ECG, 24-hour electrocardiogram and blood investigations were requested. ECG was normal. Blood test results showed low TSH titer. 24-hour electrocardiogram reports still are not ready.
I would appreciate it if you could see Miss Hassan for Fix the agreement mistake
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assessment of hyperthyroidism and if it is possible, reassuring her about future fertility.
Yours sincerely,
DoctorSubmitted by ali.homayoni93 on
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While the letter is generally well-structured and detailed, consider elaborating a bit more on the patient's medical history and the tests conducted for better clarity.
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The medical jargon is mostly appropriate, but simplifying some terms might make the letter more accessible to all potential readers.
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The letter provides a clear and complete overview of Miss Hassan's symptoms, medical history, and preliminary investigations.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure is maintained well with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making the information easy to follow.
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The writing tone is formal and appropriate for a referral letter.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.