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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In
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 technology era, we are facing the fact that some
children
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 consume most of their time with their devices.
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 issue is inevitable because now all human
activities
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 are closely related to
smartphones
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. Though having a tech-savvy generation is a positive development, I believe that the drawbacks for
children
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 with gadgets outweigh the benefits. First and foremost,
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 phenomenon arises because there has been a shift in social culture and lifestyle in the past few years. Humans now socialize with each other through online platforms, including students.
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, aside from the school, they
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 maintain their friendship through social messaging.
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, during the COVID pandemic which obliged students to study from home, they are urged to have gadgets in order to follow learning properly. Even though there is a considerable benefit of having a generation
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 familiar with technology,
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 have a short golden era. That's the parents' task to foster their
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's time with purposeful
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 and experiences.
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, arranging outdoor
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 which stimulate their physical abilities, to switch their eyes off their
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.
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, gadgets could distract their
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, mainly studying. Addiction to smartphone features,
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 as social media, will lead to procrastination and easily blur their focus on school.
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, the digital era with the massive use of
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 cannot be hindered. How
children
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 socialize nowadays has shifted a bit to online platforms.
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, parents need to engage them in screen-less
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 more to maximize their self-development and keep them away from unnecessary distractions that might be produced by excessive use of
smartphones
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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