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In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent times, many organizations allowed their
employees
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work
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 online
while
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 staying at home.
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 a considerable amount of individuals want to
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 in the
office
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. In my opinion, I agree with people who choose to
work
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 at the workplace in real life because they can interact with their colleagues and bosses,
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, they can share ideas and opinions related to business. Some corporations permit their
workers
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 to
work
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 from home because it could be convenient for them and can save money which is the cost of
office
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 bills and maintenance.
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,
workers
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 do not need to travel, which prevents the waste of time from transportation, and they can complete their tasks
while
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 sitting at home which is more convenient for them.
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,
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 with other responsibilities will have a lot of time to spend with their families as well.
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, several individuals prefer to
work
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 in their
office
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 so that they can communicate with others face to face where they exchange their ideas about the tasks, and
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 will help in the growth of the company’s economy.
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, if one worker has trouble understanding a task, he/she easily reaches out to other
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 and can get help quickly.
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, working in an
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 is not only beneficial for
workers
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 but
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 for employers as well. In conclusion,
although
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workers
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 can save their time and employers will save their money, it can cause a loss of connection with other
employees
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 and bosses which can impact
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Task Achievement
Ensure that the introduction clearly states your opinion besides discussing both views for a more direct approach.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance paragraph cohesion by using a wider range of linking words and cohesive devices.
Task Achievement
Include more varied and specific examples to support your points for improved task response quality.
General
Review grammatical accuracy and range, particularly with verb forms and agreement, to further improve your score.
Task Achievement
You have presented both views clearly and provided a reasoned opinion, reflecting a good understanding of the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a logical structure, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion. This organization aids in reader understanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
You effectively use paragraphs to separate ideas, which helps in making the essay coherent and easy to follow.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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