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Topic: some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them

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Many people believe that it's an advantage to have like-minded
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 some argue that having people with a different opinion adds more benefit to life.
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 minds that think alike can conclude a discussion swiftly, different point of view on a topic broadens one's horizon of the intellectual realm.
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 essay supports the argument of having
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 with persons who are not easily convinced by a person's thoughts. When we have a circle of
friends
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 who have similar reasons to believe in a subject matter, it is often easy and quick to derive a solution as there will be fewer or no arguments at all.
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, two
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 with similar political likings will not get into a debate supporting their
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 political figures.
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 it limits the exploration of alternatives as new ideas are not coined and discussed.
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, when everybody has their thought process on a particular topic, often ideas are brainstormed before drawing a win-win situation for all.
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, if someone blindly believes Virat Kohli is the best cricketer of the current time, and the other friend counters the claim with some other cricketer
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 many facts and statistics are reviewed and a final result is obtained based on some ranking criteria.
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 article believes that having individuals with different opinions provides better opportunities to explore and fact-check topics than having
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 who nod yes to everything one believes.
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 expands the peripheral knowledge of individuals.
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Task Achievement
Try to provide more varied and specific examples to support your arguments. This adds depth to your essay and makes your main points more convincing.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider developing your paragraphs further by adding concluding sentences that summarize the main point and link it to the overall argument of the essay. This improves clarity and cohesion.
Coherence & Cohesion
You have a clear structure with a well-defined introduction and conclusion, which effectively frames your argument.
Task Achievement
You successfully address the essay prompt, presenting a balanced view before stating your own position.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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