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The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided illustration depicts the process of
electricity
Use synonyms
 generation from coal.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the production consists of several stages, commencing with mining coal and culminating with transferring
electricity
Use synonyms
 to residential areas and factories. At the beginning of the process, coal is collected at collieries by miners.
This
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 is followed by the crushing stage where the collected coal is put into a crusher to become smaller pieces before being delivered to the gasifier.
Subsequently
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, the crushed coal will be heated and become
gas
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. In the subsequent phase, the mentioned
gas
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 will be cooled in another factory. During
this
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 step, waste heat will be discharged into the air.
Next,
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after the cooled
gas
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 undergoes the cleaning process, it will be delivered to a
gas
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 power plant.
This
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 plant will discharge the waste heat one more time
while
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 the
electricity
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 is transferred to citizens and other plants by
electricity
Use synonyms
 lines.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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