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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building thay live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #thay #research
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As modern technologies help
people
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 to easily track the
history
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 of the
house
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, many
people
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 consider the
history
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 of the
house
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 when they buy houses. There are several reasons why they search past events of the
house
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 and building and popular methods exist for
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research
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 the
history
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. Many
people
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 find the
history
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 of the houses for many reasons.
Firstly
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, the track
record
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 of the
house
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 is tightly related to the
house
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 conditions.
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, if there were
terrible
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a terrible
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 flood on the
house
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, it really
affects
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affect
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 the condition of the
house
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 because it may foster to decay
fundamental
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of fundamental
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 components of the
house
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such
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 as floors and stairs.
Secondly
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, property sellers tend to deceive
house
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 buyers about the real
history
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 of the houses since it can reduce the price of the
house
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 and building.
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 information is really critical when
people
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 buy a new
house
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, as the price of the
house
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 is extremely expensive
due to
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inflations
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inflation
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.
Therefore
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,
people
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 deeply
research
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 the
record
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 of the
house
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 to avoid becoming victims of
frauds
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.
People
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research
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 the
record
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 of the
house
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 in various ways.
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,
people
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 can easily get
the
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apply
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information
of
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about
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 the
house
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 by simply asking the old
neighbors
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neighbours
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of
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about
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 the
house
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. They have seen the
house
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 for a long time, so it would give great opportunities to
listen
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listen to
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 the naked
history
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 of the
house
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.
Secondly
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,
house
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 buyers
could
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can
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 find
the
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apply
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rich information
of
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about
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 the
house
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 on the internet because there are many active online communities.
People
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 enjoy finding the
record
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 through the internet because it gives transparent histories and they don't need to visit the
house
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 with extreme convenience. In conclusion,
people
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 find the
history
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 to buy
better conditioned
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better-conditioned
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house
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houses
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 and avoid frauds.
Also
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, there are many methods for
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research
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researching
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of
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apply
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the
house
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record
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 including asking
people
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 and
search
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searching
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 on the
internet
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Internet
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deeper connection
  • continuity with history
  • valuable
  • historically significant
  • preservation and conservation
  • cultural or architectural importance
  • curiosity
  • personal interest
  • public records and archives
  • previous ownerships
  • local historical societies
  • heritage organizations
  • anecdotes
  • official documents
  • architectural records
  • historian
  • architectural history
  • design and construction techniques
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