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The pie chart represents the source of fish import to Canada and the table shows the total value in Billions of Dollars.

The pie chart represents the source of fish import to Canada and the table shows the total value in Billions of Dollars.
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The illustrated pie chart provides information on
proportion
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the proportion
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 of
fish
 sold by
China
,
Norway
 and other countries to
Canada
,
while
table
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the table
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 indicates the total amount of money spent on
fish
 in billions of
dollar
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dollars
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 in 2010, 2015 and 2020.
Overall
, it can be seen in the pie chart that only
Norway
 did not
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 considerably over the given periods and
Canada
 has had more and more
fish
 for years. In 2010, other countries imported the highest percentage of
fish
 to
Canada
 (59%),
meanwhile
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Canada
 bought 24% and 17% of
fish
 from
Canada
 and
Norway
 respectively. The total price of
fish
 was 8.66 billion dollars in that year, which is almost half the amount compared to the final year. In 2015,
China
started
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 prevail
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his
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 rivals by 49%. There
were
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 just
3
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a 3
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%
of
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difference
on
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in
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 sales between
Norway
 and other states. The cost of imports reached 12.94
billions
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billion
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of
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dollars in 2015. In 2020,
China
 remained his privilege amongst others by 44%. The
percentagewise
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percentage
 of sales in other countries was approximately 2 times less than in
China
.
Moreover
,
Norway
 showed its best performance in that year, with a 30%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, china, norway, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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