Students should pay the full cost for their own study, because university education benefits individuals rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, learners are in advance to pay all the money for their own studies, because a college education brings more pros to individuals than social community.

This

writer disagrees with

this

statement and will explain why during the essay. It must be understood that not everyone can afford the full-cost course.

Due to

poverty, many learners just only study with the assistance of a university education. If there was not any help, they could not go to school and continue to study.

Furthermore

, they must stop their studying and start to find jobs or make money to help themselves and

also

their families. Taking students in mountainous areas in Vietnam as examples, they all live in difficulties and without assistance, they cannot study.

Therefore

, universities should only pay part of the tuition to ensure everyone can go to school. Another point worth being considered is that students have lots of motivation with the assistance of college. To be more specific, they all feel grateful and appreciative of their universities.

Thus

, educators will try their best and devote themselves a lot.

Moreover

this

also

helps the community to find out the country's talents

due to

the fact that students don’t need to spend their free time working part-time to cover college costs, rather than partaking in

such

activities to give back to society. In conclusion, providing public subsidies for tertiary education studies does not only make educators themselves a service but

also

the public thanks to the decline in criminal activities and increase in students’ participation in voluntary work.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

beneficiary
accountability
economic mobility
social inequalities
subsidized education
vocational training
deliberate choice
earning potential
public funding
societal benefits
innovation
self-financing
social mobility
economic equality
grants
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