Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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, few individuals rely on
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values
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being a decent member of
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society
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their kids.
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, some believe that teachers play a vital role in doing
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views and state my opinion
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latter view. There is no doubt that
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also
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play an important role in establishing the
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of the little ones
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while
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teaching them to be more independent.
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, I believe in the saying that '
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are the child’s first teacher'. But sometimes,
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don’t always give
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focus they need to have.
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example, there are many
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that are not privately operated and are cost
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, in these
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not every child is given proper attention,
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which sometimes,
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get bullied but there is no one to hear their worries.
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,
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teaching system is weighed on how costly
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are, the more
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schools
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better they are
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teaching
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. Not every youngster
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a
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school.
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,
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lacks the confidence of
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, as they are not taught proper leadership skills. I believe that
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play a very crucial role in building a solid foundation in
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developmental stage. Nurture starts from home, and
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is where
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need to guide their
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to be
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better
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for
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the
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society.
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, studies have revealed that
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bad parenting, and using violent
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or actions
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in front
of the child has made those
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also
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do the same with other
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and bully their classmates by following the footsteps of their
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.
Nevertheless
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, it is very important for
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to be careful of their actions and
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they use in front of their young ones, as based on psychological studies, kids grasp what is happening around them very
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and practice it on others. In conclusion,
although
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sending
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to school is one way of making them a better citizen in the future, I firmly believe
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domestic
upbringing is the main key
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a
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behaviour and making them a mannered person to serve
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their country in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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