The maps below illustrate a beachfront area in Australia from 1950 and today.

The diagram illustrates the modifications that have taken place in a beachfront area in Australia between 1950 and the present.

Overall

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it is clear that

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there are several facilities set in

while

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some of them are renovated.

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, a few of them remain untouched.

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with, A playground was obliterated and a new car park was built in the same place

instead

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. The car park on the top right was redesigned and expanded,

furthermore

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, there was a new semi-ellipse road which was connected between the large car park and a lighthouse.

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lighthouse

was

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also

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extended its size and height.

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, The first 25m pool on the right of the beach stayed the same but a new surf club sprung up beside it.

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, the second pool on the left was expanded from 25m to 50m. A restaurant was assembled on the left-hand side of the new 50m pool and in the middle of these two buildings, the second surf club appeared.

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May 7, 2024

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

163 words

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