The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given two maps show modifications in the bookstore between 2000 and 2024.
Overall
,
while
the addition of
cafe
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a cafe
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has
clear
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clearly
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changed the store’s arrangement the variety and organization of genres have not been improved or changed
First,
the store now contains a new cafe, which has replaced a long wall that previously
shown
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shows
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fiction books. The
center
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centre
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of the room, once
area
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an area
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to
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for
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the hobbies, art, and cookery sections, is now occupied with tables for the cafe,
while
the entire non-fiction section has been converted into
this
new space.
This
notable change has led to
in
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apply
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all genres, except for travel and new books, being moved and combined together in a single section.
Secondly
, the initial view when entering the store stays unchanged. The travel and new
book shelves
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bookshelves
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are still positioned opposite the entrance, and the service desk is still in its first spot at the right corner from
entrance
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the entrance
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.
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