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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can be better for their overall skills development and creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#activity #child #skills #development #creativity
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The creativity and total
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 of
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 can be developed by doing enjoyable exercises.
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 I agree that interesting activities could increase the
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's
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skills
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, I believe that reading is the best activity for their minds. Studies show that
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children
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 are doing any intellectual or enjoyable activities, they focus on many things.
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, they can grasp some new information and some
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such
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 as creativity, attention, fast thinking development
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 physical
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.
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, playing chess.
Children
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 try to find another option, analyse the new information, manage their time and make final decisions as they are playing their favourite game.
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, many scientists, and scholars recommended that the best way to improve young people's mental
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 is by reading. From a scientific perspective,
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's brains accept a lot of information and analyse it as they are reading books, articles or journals. It can be caused by improving concentration, memory and vocabulary, increasing imagination and creativity and
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enhance
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knowledge.
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, it keeps young people's brains active and reduces stress. On top of
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, reading could improve
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's communication
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 and mental health.
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 the statistics, people who are the most famous in the world spend approximately two hours reading every day and they consider that it is the reason for their achievements. In conclusion, doing enjoyable games or activities might be beneficial for
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's total
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.
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, mental
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 are increased by reading.
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