These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, families have been affected by social evolution, some fathers prefer taking care of their children
while
the mothers work. There are several reasons to explain
this
, which we will discuss. A different approach to work has seen the world recently. One of the major reasons is changes in societies that have greatly impacted the family ideal of the working father and the mother who stays at home. As time goes by, social consciousness has been rising in today’s world societies,
thus
provoking multiple changes in people’s vision of things, like labour in
this
case.
Therefore
, more women decided to fight against the old women's vision that we had. I believe that
this
development has been positive.
Firstly
, now people are freer to do what they want whether it is staying at home or having labour.
This
change in people’s lives
also
benefits the fathers who can now spend more time with them and enjoy their childhood.
Secondly
,
this
is an important victory in the feminist movement: now they are no longer seen as simple housewives but occupy the same place as men in
this
society and more precisely in the workplace.
For example
, to illustrate that
this
development is important, we can see that in some emerging countries which have not experienced
this
change, the situation is unbelievably bad for women like in Palestine where they do not have the right to be the breadwinners.
To sum up
, there has been an evolution that has marked our living environment, that of mothers who work more and fathers who decide to stay at home.
This
is explained by the fight for women’s rights
as well as
men who evolve on their part and
this
development has had a positive impact. Given
this
,
this
change will continue to increase for a few years.
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You have effectively identified and expanded on relevant reasons for the shift in traditional family roles.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, guiding the reader smoothly.
task achievement
The argument promotes a balanced perspective, acknowledging the positive outcomes of the change described.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breadwinner
  • caregiving
  • paternal leave
  • societal perceptions
  • gender roles
  • flexible working conditions
  • personal preference
  • father-child relationship
  • emotional and social development
  • household responsibilities
  • career opportunities
  • professional achievements
  • balanced parenting
  • earning potential
  • social stigma
  • societal pressure
  • discrimination
  • traditional mindsets
  • resentment
  • adjustment
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