These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays, it is more evident to see fathers taking care of their children and spending more time at home.
This
essay will give reasons for this
and explain why it is something positive for development, especially for family relationships and women's social rights.
The first point is that in our society, many more wives have jobs. In short, mothers are not able to take care of children because they leave the house during the day. In my opinion, that is
fantastic because being a wife you are in greater conditions than before. In fact, when mothers go out, they are not dependent on their husbands as they were and have financial freedom, nowadays. For example
, according to
Le Figaro a French newspaper, in Europe, in 2023, dads spent on average 7,8 hours in their workplaces and women 7,4.
Secondly
, fathers usually now work less than they were. Consequently
, the home’s family structure is changing because men are able to stay and parents spend equal time at home. Also
, the father can spend more time with his children making a better relationship. For instance
, in accord with my uncle Manuel, he is happier when he is in Madrid than when he goes to Milan where his company has an office. He argues that in Spain he can spend more moments with his daughter which makes his life better.
To conclude
, in general, parents have now a more equilibrated situation, both can be at home and labour in the office. I believe that it is something very great that gives the possibility to fix social issues like women's rights and family problems.Submitted by santos_dij on
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