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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The chart below

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The chart below
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Resented for consideration are two line graphs which depict the
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statistics
stadistics
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statistics
 of obtaining electrical
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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 and the
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time
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tine
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time
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 utilized for doing chairs in different households of a nation from 1920 to 2019
Overall
, it can be seen that the number of households that acquire electrical essentials rose considerably throughout the timeline,
however
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 the
hours
 spent on chairs experienced a downward trend in the
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aforementioned
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forementioned
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 period looking at the figures in
further
 detail, washing machines
was
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 the most used appliance in 1920 at exactly 40
percent
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per cent
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 which
then
 increased considerably to nearly double the previous figures at approximately 78
percent
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per cent
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 in 2019. Movingento vacuum cleaner acquirements
which
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also
 experienced a dramatic growth from precisely 30
percent
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 in 1920 and 100
percent
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 in 2000,
conversely
 it remained the same a year later.
In
addition
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 refrigerator was the least popular electrical kitchen device, nearly 21
percent
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per cent
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 of households
own
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 a fridge in 1920 but the figures rocketed to 50 times its original amount of consumers at 100%. in 1980 which remained the same
at the end
 of the timeline. Turning to the remaining
stalistics
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statistics
 where the amount of time is
putted
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put
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 into
house work
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housework
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whic
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which
50
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hours
 a week
at
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mitial
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initial
yeur
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your
year
,
noreover
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moreover
 it plummeted to 20
hours
 in the next 4 decades.
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 the latter figure dropped gradually to almost 10
hours
 per week in 2019
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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