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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts illustrate the statistics on
Canadian's
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Canadian
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 and
Australian's
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Australian
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citizens
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citizens'
citizen's
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 marital status.
Overall
, it
is
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can be seen that the majority of the population in both
country
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countries
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 are married. The Canadian witnessed
significant
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a significant
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 proportion of separated but not divorced,
whereas
 most of the
Australian
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Australians
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lives
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live
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together with
 their spouses.
To begin
 with, the largest proportion of people in Canada and Australia are married, contributing well over 80%.
However
, roughly 50% of the Canadian couple no longer live together, higher than the married 20%.
In contrast
, just under 50% of
the
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Australian
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Australians
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 still married, Canada experiences
same sex
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same-sex
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 marriage at 3%,
while
the
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apply
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Australia has none. Moving on to people who
is
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are
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 living alone, In both countries, these people account for less than a tenth in each
categories
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category
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.
While
 Canada shows
higher
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a higher
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 fraction
in
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of
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 single and widowed status,
the
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apply
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Australian
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Australians
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is
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are
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 more likely to be divorced, with 2% of the population.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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