The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking the visitors how satisfied they were with their visit , during the same two period.

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The table illustrates information about the number of

visitors

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to Ashdown

Museum

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throughout the whole

year

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before and the

year

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after it was improved.

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, charts show the results of questionnaires asking visitor’s opinions on how good their service was during the same two periods.

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, after the

museum

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's refurbishment the total number of

visitors

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increased.

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, their response was more positive. The

year

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before their refurbishment 74000

people

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visited Ashdown

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, the

year

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after the development 92000

people

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came to the

museum

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. Before the development, most of the

visitors

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said that they were dissatisfied with their tour

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the

museum

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, 10

percent

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of the

visitors

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were very dissatisfied. After their refurbishment, the percentage of very satisfied

people

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increased from 15% to 35%.

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, there has been no change in the percentage of

people

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who gave no response.

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, the percentage of very dissatisfied

people

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had a huge change. It decreased by 30%.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking the visitors how satisfied they were with their visit , during the same two period.

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Most countries aim to improve their standard of living through economis development,but many important social values can be lost as a result . Do the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages ?

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.