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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

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At a time when developed countries are giving importance to economic
development
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, there are different voices of citizens who say that the progress of the other side is
also
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 playing an important role in that
country
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. In my opinion, having a good economy is the priority for the
country
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's
development
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First,
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a
country
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 has a great advantage if it has a good economy. If the government has funds, it can increase the amount of benefits provided to citizens. At the same time, it allows the implementation of many projects for the residents of the
country
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.
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, the Hong Kong government is rich. They will spend money on libraries, beaches and sports
centers
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.
Such
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 facilities can improve the quality of life.
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, it should be a priority for an economically developed
country
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.
On the other hand
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, progress in other areas is
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 important for the
country
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. The government is not the only one with economic growth. They will improve education, social welfare and the environment.
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, all breakthroughs cost money.
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, if I want to improve my education, I need to pay teachers and build schools. All
this
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 requires a stable economy to provide sufficient resources.
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, it is important to have enough funds to support the
development
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 of the
country
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.
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,
although
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 some people believe that other types of growth are important for the
development
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 of a
country
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. I firmly believe that economic progress is the most important goal for countries.

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Task Response
Ensure a clear stance throughout your essay but also fully explore contrasting views to strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to enhance flow between sentences and paragraphs, improving clarity and cohesion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Develop paragraphs with a topic sentence followed by supporting details and examples for more effective structuring.
Task Achievement
Your essay effectively addresses the prompt, presenting a clear argument supported by examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion clearly state your viewpoint, contributing to a logically structured essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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