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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
#shops #country
The line graph compares two
type
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types
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 of
shops
 which the
number
 of closed and new opened in a country in seven years
Overall
,
shops
 that closed dropped significantly in that period but
this
 rate grew
up
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apply
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at the end
 of
term
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the term
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. The
number
 of closed
shops
 did not observe very much
however
, it declined final stage. The
amount
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number
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 of closed
shops
 changed its grade several times between 2011 and 2014 from 5500 to 7100 respectively but
line
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the line
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 graph shows that
on
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apply
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its amount had a
significantly
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significant
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 reduction in 2015
nearly
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by nearly
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 500. At that time
opened
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opens
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 did not have as
quickly
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quick
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 plunge. After that time closures
grow
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grew
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 just above
5
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5k
k
 in 2016. The next
3 year
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3-year
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closures
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closure
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 grade changed
among
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between
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5
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5k
k
 and 5,2
k
 The amount of opened
shops
 decreased sharply to
4
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4k
k
 in 2012
than
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then
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 it increased
till
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to
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6
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6k
k
 from 2012 to 2014. At that time the total of department store started to drop
4
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4k
k
 and 4,1k respectively. In 2018 it reached its
a the
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apply
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lowest point in 8 years approximately
3
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3k
k
 in 2018. The graph below shows the
number
 of
shops
 that closed and the
number
 of new
shops
 that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number, k with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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