The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line graph compares the
number
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of closures and newly opened
shops
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in one country during the 2011 and 2018 years.
Overall
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,
while
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the rate of openings decreased year by year, the rate of
shops
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that are closed increased.
To begin
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with opened
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, the starting point was more than 8000 in 2011,
however
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in the next year it sharply decreased to 4000. After some time it started to increase and reached 6000 in 2014, which in 2015 experienced a decline to exactly 4000 and stayed at
this
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number
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until 2017. In 2018 it finished with a decrease, where the
number
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consisted of 3000. Meanwhile, as we can see, the closure of
shops
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rate in 2011 was more than 6000, approximately 6500, which declined to 6000 in 2012.
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it experienced growth to nearly 7100 in 2013.
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, in 2014 it decreased to its starting point, 6500. In 2015, it roundly declined to 500,
then
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it again rose to 5000 in 2016 and in the end,
this
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number
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stayed without changes until 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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