Students should pay full costfor their own study, because university education benefits individuals rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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, there are some assets for universal
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who purchase a certain cost on studying fields with
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positive impact on
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than
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following paragraph will discuss more about it. First of all,the studying programme
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a lot of payments which
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used to support public purposes. The costs of studying that containing social activities thereby doing volunteers and raising money for
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were conducted by some colleges
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each year. If
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pay all of
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costs, it
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for improving the infrastructure and the
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environment
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. Many social requirements
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enviromental
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environmental
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cost is the benefit that
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completely on
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,
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they can focus on the fundamental fields of studying programme. There
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no doubt about the positive effects that
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gain.
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priority in some cases, the
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and teachers will pay more attention to
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than the payment they must purchase. Many workers
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university
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have their salaries in
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period
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it will improve their
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of teaching. In conclusion, there are some assets
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both sides which impact
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society and
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, the benefit of
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taken a lot of consideration than the other.
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