The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the
numbers
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number
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of visitors to Ashdown Museum from the
year
before to the
year
after it was refurbished. The two charts compare the
consequence
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consequences
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of surveys asking guests how satisfied they were with their journey, during the same periods.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the total of visitors who were satisfied with their travel between the
year
before, and the
year
after refurbishment. It can be seen that the total of tourists decreased sharply who
dissatisfied
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about
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with
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traveling
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from
a
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half of
pie
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chart to 20
percent
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.
In addition
, there was not any alteration for visitors who had no response. In the
year
after refurbishment, the number of guests was similar to people who had very satisfied people on 5%. In the
year
before refurbishment, the total of tourists who were extremely dissatisfied was 40% which was the highest proportion in
this
chart.
However
, after that period, the highest proportion altered from dissatisfying to satisfying in that construction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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