our local newspaper is offering an award for people who have helped the community. Write a letter to the newspaper editor. In your letter suggest someone you think should receive the award describe what the person does to help the community suggest an award that would be appropriate for this person You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to highly recommend one of my
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for the community award, and she is
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a member of our community volunteer. She is Ms. Chole Sampson, a 40-year-old Canadian who is
also
a full-time teacher at ABD school. She graduated from Beijing University and spent over 20 years in China, mainly focusing on
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education. I believe that
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Chole should receive a special award because she spends over 15 hours every week in the community library answering questions about family reading and
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reading activities that
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children to read more books and
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them to build great reading habits.
Moreover
, she holds reading clubs for different age groups, and children in the programs love her very much. I suggest that the newspaper offers her a medal and a title as a warm-hearted teacher.
Furthermore
, since she is holding a reading club about islands
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country, if she could get a free island trip, that would be fantastic.
As a result
, she will have more stories to share with children in her reading club. I am looking forward to your response. Sincerely, Carey
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Coherence and Cohesion
Continue to clearly structure your letters with a logical flow and distinct paragraphs for each idea.
Language
Keep using a variety of sentence structures to maintain readability and engagement.
Accuracy
Ensure to proofread your writing to catch any minor inaccuracies or typos that might occur.
Task Response
Your letter effectively addresses all parts of the task with a clear recommendation, description, and suggestion for the award.
Tone
You maintained a formal and appropriate tone throughout the letter, well-suited to the context of writing to a newspaper editor.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your paragraphs are well-organized, each focusing on a single idea, which aids in presenting your suggestions coherently.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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